Snazzy Snippets #1


Heyyyy young bloods! Today I'll be participating in Snazzy Snippets, another link-up for writers, this one focused on sharing snippets from your works in progress! This edition's snippets are from my fantasy series, tentatively titled The World of the Four Pillars. So, without further ado, here we go! I hope you enjoy :)

1. A snippet from page 16.

Aleuna sat with her legs pulled up to her chest, chin resting on her knees, eyes staring into the writhing orange fire. Its hisses and pops echoed in the silent night air, the only sounds other than the occasional eerie hoot of an owl.

2. A snippet of 16 words or fewer.

"She plays the basic essence of the game, the one made of mud and bare bones."
(Horatio Aradassian, Commander of the Galhorn City Watch, 
describing Ydda Del'Takvisha, a street thief.)

3. A snippet about something new, e.g. a new year, new school, introducing a new person/character/setting, a new revelation.

"Meanwhile, in the city of Galhorn, capital of Cavanor, Lord Commander Horatio Aradassian of the Outer City Watch was standing at his window, looking out over the city with half-glazed eyes, and clutching a cup of black tea in his shaking hand. The sun had barely risen, and already he'd had a bad day."

(As you may or may not be able to tell, Horatio is my smol bean.)

Well, that's all for today! What are your current WIPs? How are they doing? I'd love to hear! Comment below, and have an awesome day. :)

Namarië,
Ellie

14 comments:

  1. Snippet 1: I feel like I'm sitting there with her. The scene is familiar, but whether from family camping trips or a dream or another book I don't know.
    Snippet 2: sounds like we're describing a godly figure, something ethereal and aloof. Reminds me of the bit in Good Omens with God playing chess (and later, solitaire) of perhaps a game of poker but with blindfolds and very high stakes.
    Mud and bare bones reminds me of some Night Vale quote that I can't remember at the moment. There are lots of quotes involving mud and bones and often blood.
    Also, with just a few more apostrophes, the street their could be a Lovecraftian outer God. (I have not actually read HP Lovecraft's books, but did look into them after researching the Cthulu (you know, the octopabatman that sometimes appears in my posts.))
    Snippet 3: I feel u, horatio. Why is it only Wednesday?

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    1. That is very good! That is what I was going for. Thank you.
      Hah, no. Ydda is merely a petty street thief - she dances with death on a daily basis, leaping out of the reach of his fingers just in time, barely surviving on the mean streets off of thievery from those who aren't even that rich themselves. Her sister, Ambria, who lives in the palace (for various reasons Ydda disapproves of) looks down on her nose at her sister for laughing at death so and courting it willingly, because she (Ambria) thinks that the matter of life and death is too serious to joke about and play with. To provide the full quote (Horatio talking to Ambria): Horatio leaned in closer. “Just for your information, you’re playing a game with death, too. The same thing you look down on your sister for courting, only you do it at a game of higher stakes and greater subtlety. She plays the stripped-down, basic essence of the game, the one made of mud and bare bones where all is plain if one only looks at things the right way, where death is open about his presence and stares you straight in the face. But you can’t tell me being the courtesan to one of the most powerful men in Cavanor is without its risks too, hmm? Without its chess pieces being oh-so-carefully moved behind masks and screens of gilt and jewels and silk. Yes, she is playing a game - but so are you, and a harder one. You say she is a maniac - but really, which of the two of you is taking greater risks? Who will affect more people if she fails?” He straightened up and inclined his head slightly. “Good day, Miss Del’Takshiva.”
      I would normally be afraid I'm rambling on too long about something you don't care about, but this is you so I'm not. Idk if you even understood it though, I explained it poorly.
      I feel him, too. It feels like Friday.

      - Ellie

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    2. DUDE
      THAT EXCERPT
      YET ANOTHER EXAMPLE OF YOUR AMAZING WRITING. This is by an experienced writer. This isn't a newbie teen girl writer. This is professional. Get yourself published, friend.

      I understand it. Here, I can put it in caveman language: SISTER 1 LIVE AT CASTLE. SHE DATE HUMANS. SISTER 2 LIVE ON STREET. SHE STEAL. SHE DO DANGER STUFF.
      TGEY NO LIKE EACHOTHRR.

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    3. AWWWWWWWWWWW OH MY GOSH GWEN I CAN'T STOP SMILING THANK YOUUUUUUUUU.
      That is actually perfectly accurate. Excellent summary.

      - Ellie

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    4. You are amazing and I can't handle it.
      In other good news:
      I finished good omens
      I lent it to Donald, who returned it 2 days later saying it was the funniest book he ever read, and that the bit with crowley's houseplants was the best.
      John bough a copy for himself, the white one with Crowley on the cover. Mine is the black one with aziraphale on the cover. We match. He says that Satan speaking to Crowley through the radio is the funniest bit.

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    5. Thank you!
      I have the black copy too. AWWWW YESSS SPREADING GOOD OMEN VIBES. They're both wrong, the best bit was when Crowley was cornered in his apartment.

      - Ellie

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  2. Ooh ooh ooh I like the sound of this.
    ~Kathryn

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  3. OOOoooo! This sounds interesting! ;)
    And btw, you got nominated for the Liebster Award! :D
    ~ Suzy

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  4. I loooooove that last snippet. LOVE IT, I TELL YOU. *flails wildly* And also #2. Seriously, omg, you have a way with words. YOU TALENTED BEAN, YOU.
    Thanks for stopping by @ Paper Fury!

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  5. Oh my gosh oh my gosh #2. I am dying here. And #3 kinda cracked me up even though I really want to squish him because aaaah he's just so adorable. And your names are so fantastic and innovative! Absolutely fabulous snippets, thank you for linking up with us!

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    1. Ahhhhh thank you so much!
      Ikr, he's such a bean.

      - Ellie

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